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Wednesday, 20 March 2013

The Magic Shirt Machine by Nashiruddin

A Scottish man invented a shirt machine that can make any type of shirt in the world.

First he collected all of the bits that he could see in the island, then he put it in the old barn.

Next he eat chocolate because he says that chocolate helps his brain for thinking which t-shirt he will make.

Third he type all of the information for making the


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  1. TO BE CONTINED.........................
    the t-shirt at the computer and the machine will do what the computer says.

    turning on
    After that he pressed a red button at the floor and the machine started to make funny noise and then the t-shirt comes out in a hole.

    shirt he make
    Then he made different kind of t-shirt by the shirt machine such as
    .Edible shirt( a shirt that we can chew easily)
    .Musical shirts(a shirt that comes out so many trumpets at the back if we press a button)
    .Invisible shirt(for people if they want to show-of)
    .colourful shirt(a shirt that can change different colours in a second)
    .Long sleeves shirt( used for winter or autum)

    selling shirts
    Finally he sells the shirts to his shop in Scottland (not in the island were he lives(city)).

    The shop are spectacular
    but it may cost a lot of
    money!

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    1. That.'s great! Clear paragraphs and sub headings. We just need pictures....... we can do that in school.
      Great work.

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  2. Nurul Farhanah 4Q20 March 2013 at 16:58

    Third he type all of the information for making the T-shirt.Then he press the go botton and the machine will make a weird sound.Then the T-shirt that he mad will go out from the machine and it's already pack up in nice fabulous pack.

    He write down all the shirt that he make in the book.He had mad an Edible shirt,musical shirt,invisible shirt,and a change colour shirt.

    At the end the shirt machine was so fabulous in the scotland.Everyone want to buy his shirt that make from The Shirt Machine.

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    1. Brilliant! Clear paragraphs. Prehaps tomorrow we can make the list using bullet points, and also add some pictures.
      Well done.

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  3. Now I know nashiruddin's explanatory text is on the blog page!

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  4. Cool !
    I wonder why its not finished I am looking forward to the next work on the page.

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    1. You should finish it.... or write your own explanatory text here...just like Akira and Nurul Farhanah have done.

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  5. CONTINUED
    Third he type all the information in the computer then he press a green button on the floor then the machine starts to make a weird noise and the machine pops out for the man a special T-shirt and the T-shirt will be packed neatly.


    once the t-shirt is packed neatly the scotish man writes different type of shirt in his book and he will sell it in shops and malls and soon evryone will buy them.


    the man made an edible shirt,invisible shirt,musical shirt and a change-the-colour shirt.

    Did you know that it took him 10 years to make the machine!.

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    1. Sarah you forgot to put capital letter at the biginning
      of your sentence although I liked your continued explanatory!!!( text try to add sub heading!).

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  6. akira you spelt continued wrong!

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    1. OK now I know how to spell continued thanks for telling me!

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    2. Sarah again you forgot capital letters at the biggining of your sentence!

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  7. Great paragraphs.
    What did you forget?(The start of all sentences....)
    Your last, brilliant sentence is a question, what should it have at the end?

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  8. Oops!a question mark!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!.

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  9. And a capital letter!!!!!!.

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  10. Can we another explanatory text?

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    1. I have no idea what you mean Sarah!

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    2. you do have an idea!

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  11. I forget the 'have' between the 'we' and the'explanatory'.

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  12. Now do you have an idea what I mean?

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